Ghost story
It was a dark night in my house, and in my house there is a basement and from there I heard a strange noise.
I went downstairs, and there I found a weird mirror. The mirror was not mine, I thought the mirror was old and beautiful. Suddenly, I saw someting strange in the mirror. I thought I imagined it, but when I looked again I saw an old woman. She had white skin and red eyes. I screamed and ran up into my bathroom. I called the police and when they came they thought I was lying to them. I didn´t sleep at all that night .
I dozed of, and suddenly a door slammed and I woke up in fear. I screamed out loud. Then I heard things falling to the floor. I ran downstairs to the kitchen and it was a mess, everything was thrown all over the place. The candels and the cutlery lay on the floor, someone had been here. I shivered and my hands shook terribly. When I calmed down I started to look around me and then I realized that the huge kitchen knife was gone. I froze. I searched in the kitchen but I could not find the knife anywere. The fear came back to me and I froze once again. I thought it was a dream but then I pinched myself, and it was no dream at all.
Once more I saw her again and she came towards me. I ran over to my neighbour. When I came into my neighbour I found out that the whole family was dead. I screamed out in terror. The woman went after me, she started to stab me with the kitchen knife. She killed me!
Now I am a ghost. I live in the basement of my house and I scare everyone who lives in the house.
The family who lives there have no idea what will happen to them......
Your story is full of words where you descibe how the character feels in this weird house, this creates an emotion to the reader. The story feels spooky. It is important to use word which descibes things connected with the senses.
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